雅思写作范文之毕业生就业难

Last night，I got an Email for a sample writing by myself.
Then, I wrote a sample.
注：昨晚收到一学生来信，索要雅思试题例文，请求我帮着写一篇！
题目：In many countries, more and more young people are leaving school and unable to find jobs after graduation. What problems do you think youth unemployment will cause to the individual and the society? Give reasons and make some suggestions.
例文：
When we read newspapers, our attention is always attracted by increasing unemployment rate in young graduates who are leaving college. In my opinion, there are many causes for this disquieting phenomenon and we should try to solve the problem.
Most companies would rather employ a low-educational specialized worker than a this-year’s graduate from a well-known university. For companies, they are more likely to choose the candidates with rich working experience. Apparently enough, the training for young graduates usually costs them a large quantity of time and money. In addition, the current education system brings on a lot of bookworms who are adept in theoretical but not practical knowledge. Therefore, it is hard for those graduates to complete the practical assignments successfully and smoothly. This is one major reason why many graduates find it to find suitable jobs.
An un-mandatory retirement age is another factor leading to the youth unemployment for college graduates. Along with the improving of working efficiency, proficient employees with rich and extensive working experience get retired at a much later age. In this case, for young graduates, there are fewer chances to get access to the jobs taken up by the older and more experienced.
However, the youth unemployment may cause serious social problems. Due to the gloomy job markets, college students may leave school before finishing their academic study, thus the higher education system will be challenged, and more seriously, the importance of higher education will be doubted. This will cause retrogression in education.
To solve this grave problem, both colleges and students should take some actions. On one hand, it is advisable for colleges to adjust courses more closely related to the future jobs. On the other hand, students in college, as future candidates for employment, should not only get a good command of professional knowledge but also take part in some practical exercises to be prepared for the future jobs. In addition, government may stage laws and regulations to assist graduates in finding jobs.